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Azula
08-22-2009, 06:24 AM
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The Narrator is Yoshina Fubiki (Ageha's Big-Sister)

Narrator (Fubiki):

I have always cared for my little brother, Ageha, ever since our mother passed away.

Watching his motives; his feelings towards life, and most importantly his curfew.
He probably thinks of me as some sorta bitch, but hey, at least he thinks of me..

Recently, I've noticed he's been acting strange. His stupid excuse for helping people by getting into fights.

I've always warned him! Told him I'd beat the crap out of him. But he never sees it my way!
That's why I always play the part of bringing mom into his teeny tiny brain.

Sheesh! Do you know how many times our neighbors spotted Ageha in some sort of troubling situation?
He's embarrassing me! That little brat! He think he is a true man!

Ever since he was in elementary school, he has always looked for trouble.
Now he's in High School and is still behaving the same way! He hasn't changed a bit!

I just wonder if he's ever thought about his future. How would mom feel about his current situation!?

Anyways, after coming from work late at night, I saw him looking like a spoiled vegetable.
He probably didn't realize it but his nose was bleeding.
But who cares, all I need right now is a beer.




TO BE CONTINUED....

aUsCkEs
08-22-2009, 06:54 AM
Oh well, that is actually not bad, but I think there's too much feeling mixed into it. Maybe she should have some pity for him or whatever, but I believe it was overdone. Lovely, though.

Azula
08-22-2009, 09:03 AM
Thanks for the review!! Luckly, I haven't revised or finished this yet. So things will be changed here and there...

TheQwertiest
08-22-2009, 09:45 AM
Hm... It would make a nice O-Make for Psyren if there were some pics in it =)
Though it is a little plain only with text as it is now.
Of course, this all might change depending on what sort of continuation you'll create ^^